It had been a full month since her the local mailmare had taken a day off, the very first she ever took one would tell you. None had ever known the true reason for it, nor would anypony ever know for sure. All of them were glad of course when she would return and deliver again the letters and precious packages, the day right after. Only a single day had passed but it was enough for many to miss her cheerful attitude, her reliable almost like clockwork timing, and even her funny bright eyes and colorful spelling. However the situation was not like they remembered.
The first week, most if not everypony had noticed the changes. While the most perceptive could see the dark circles under her eyes, the others would take notice of her lack of energy first. The heart-warming cheerfulness of her smile reduced to a shy smile, forced when they looked directly at her. The inextinguishable burning enthusiasm in her luminous eyes cooled down to a weak flickering light. Like any good pony worthy of respect, they asked about of her troubles, offering help if she desired it. But, she refused politely, in her own particular way, and they knew better than to force the blue-gray pegasus. Maybe a far-away relative was sick or had died? , they thought and went back to their daily life.
In the next two weeks, the mailmare seemed to take a turn for the better. Her expression became less sad, less mournful, and more neutral. On the exterior nopony would have been able to take note of anything particular about her, but that was in fact the most troubling thing. From her previously usual happy figure to her joyless spirit of before, the mailmare was now wearing a blank mask void of emotions. Day after day, she would do her work, delivering letters and packages fast, silently, without a word. Some were intrigued by her new attitude which was so different, and almost unsettling, compared to what they remembered of the blond mailmare. Others who used to know her, slightly more than the rest but not much, tried to cheer her up going as far as to make a big party for her only. But to no avail, she never attended. The well known Party Pony even offered her some of her famous 'Super-Duper-Happylicious' cupcakes, a most unique recipe kept for the most special occasions, but she declined them. After this, many ponyvilians got worried for her well being, never from pony memory had she ever refused a 'muffin' as she called them. But the pegasus would tell them that everything was 'as it should be', and they would all return to their life... All but one purple unicorn and her little dragon; one day a message was sent to somewhere unknown.
Today marked the first month, since a certain little unicorn had been torn from her loved home. The day when the world had collapsed for a certain brilliant, yet somewhat clumsy pegasus. It was a cold day of autumn, quite breezy, and most of the leafage had already fallen from the trees near the mailmare's house, creating large puddles of red and golden leaves everywhere.
The house was already buzzing with activity that morning, as it was still early for this pony to start her day. It was earlier than normal even with the new heavily charged schedule she had insisted to take a few weeks ago; all in the hope that the work charge and fatigue of the day would ease her pain and block her mind, but with little success. The poor mare hadn't slept well again the night before, because she knew what day the Sun would bring next, and at the present moment she only desired to occupy herself in order to forget the gloomy date.
A moment before, she was securing the pouches that would hold her burden for the day, the next moment she was answering the door after she heard three gentle knocks. As she opened the door, the amount of surprise suddenly painted on the visage of the mare would have scarred any cockatrice, for on her doorstep was two ponies. One stallion in its golden armor, reflecting the first rays of the Sun, and one much smaller who was holding carefully between its teeth a letter with the royal insignia.
To my loyal subject: Miss Bright-Eyes Hooves.
42 Maple Street, Ponyville.
Dear Miss Hooves:
I write to you personally, in this day of the Fall Season, in regard to the events involving you and the Ministry of Social Development upon the removal of your daughter (Dinky Hooves).
It has come to my attention that reports, from anonymous sources, had led the branch of the Equestrian Foal Protection Agency (EFPA) to take actions over your case. It would seem that hasty measures had been taken by this committee, following the apparent urgency of the mentioned reports based on minimal evidences from your 'condition', from which I hadn't been informed until very recently. For this, I must give you my sincere excuses.
I wish for you to believe my words, when I say that the tragic situation that your family had been the object is a rare and uncanny occurrence that shouldn't have happened. But, as everypony in this world aren't exempt of mistakes, some are bound to happen. Rest assured that an official will be hired shortly to look upon the process which led to this error, in order to prevent any more mishaps and to perfect the procedure.
I must salute your devotion as a mailmare, from the various letters of praise and recommendation received in the last week from the small town of Ponyville, and again I must apologies. I can only hope that this whole matter hasn't permanently undermined your trust and respect toward the Equestrian Government.
Celestia De Solaris of Canterlot, Prime-Ruler of Equestria, Princess of the sun.
The letter, lying on the ground over a bed of gilded leaves, wouldn't be read by either concerned ponies until much later that day, as both were held close into a tender motherly embrace. Each one now on their knees holding the other, as if they feared that the other would vanish if they let go for even a second. Nopony moving to break the moment, warm torrents of tears dripping from their faces.
The royal guard couldn't help but smile at the display of raw emotions, even though he was a veteran, such amount of love would soften even the hardiest of heart. Especially for an old stallion like himself. Passing discreetly around the family, he grabbed the letter before it flew in the wind, and put it in the mailbox. He too had foals waiting for his return and so, giving a last look at the pegasus and the unicorn, he flew away with the finely decorated coach in direction of Canterlot.
Several minutes after they were left alone, Bright-Eyes finally found the will to liberate Dinky from her protective hug, and look in her beautiful daughter's eyes still wet from all the crying. The young mare's voice was soft and filled with tenderness, as she gathered all the concentration she could mustered at that moment.
''Muffin! ...m-MY Muffin! Love forever, never fish away again''.
Once more Dinky hugged her mother, this time as they entered their dear home after having left its reassuring warmth for far too long. Once more the post office would be asked for an exceptional day off, which would be given no question asked, this time for a completely different purpose.
During the rest of the day, they would play together around the house more than they ever did before and they would roll amongst the ocean of leaves giggling heartily. Soon, as the sun progressively set and illuminated the interior with the twilight, the happy members of this family would slowly enjoy some hot cocoa while listening patiently to each other tall tales of adventure and imaginary battles of heroic proportion. Before either of them would realize it, time had passed and night was upon them, and so they readied themselves for bed. Under heavy blankets, after a story of knights and princesses and a goodnight kiss, both would join the kingdom of their dreams.
Amongst the cottony clouds of candy and the giant muffins, two ponies could be seen galloping and jumping hoof in hoof, as they made their way toward the moon. The stars, which were smiling at them, let go many bright shooting lights, during that fantastic night. Finally, they would be happy ...and forever together.
*Alt.Ending for this story:
*This story is an Alternative Ending (though itís almost as big) that insert itself and replace the End right after:
<With that, she left Derpy alone in an empty house.>
*You can also replace the end of the original title (, and Forever) with:
...and Forever Together
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Complete title without the annoying limitation : MLP:FiM - ...and Forever Together
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LARGE EDIT 2 : Story now -Version 2-
Many thanks to :
-EvolutionCOV / EvoCOV (complete proof-read)
-Cudle (a few things)
I must say this...
-I read the original story.
-I agree this was Sad.
-The reason behind the Ending, that, I STRONGLY disagree. Who in their right mind would think that Derpy is unfit to be a good parent ? Seriously ??
The goal of this Alt.Ending (I could say Story, it's almost as big as the one its based on, really.) is to provide the reader with ''A choice'', the opportunity to experience a more satisfying course of actions...
Personally, I'm especially proud of the line I gave to Derpy, near the end... A single, yet heavy sentence for her.
Now, Enjoy !
But your fic? It's different. Sure, it's a story that's meant to grant the crying audience's wish, but it's a good one this time. Heck, this might even be able to stand as it's own fic. It was touching, and it made me happy. Not just 'okay, ya got what you want. The end'. I actually loved seeing Ditzy and Dinky together again.
Your story warms my heart, and is indeed Equestria Daily worthy. I hope to see more of your stories in the future.
But, as for here and now, thank you.
From what I remember, you simply do what you usually do for when you submit something, but you select the *.txt or the *.doc (*.docx) instead. Be sure to select the 'Literature' (and etc) category, before finishing.
There's also the FimFiction website, which is better formatted for submitting stories.
(You can also post it here AND there, for maximum exposure. :3 )
I just happened onto this story a couple of days ago. Thank you so much for writing a different ending. Derpy (or Ditsey) is a beautiful mare and has such love for everypony around her.....it's hard to understand why anyone would be mean to her or not like her.
I realize that she is only a character in a wonderful, caring story; I'm an adult, after all.....but Derpy reminds me so much of myself that to me she is real. And always will be. And I will love her forever.
Thank you again for making this a much more beautiful story and showing what friendship is all about.
>Under heavy blankets, after a story of knights and princesses and a goodnight kiss, both would join the kingdom of their dreams.
Nothing is perfect I know, obviously, but some things that aren't desirable and don't quite make full sense should be ''reworked''.
So... I chose to create an alternative, which still followed a similar 'emotional' idea... but, more positive, of course.
just... Thank you...
I needed this...
Or what you said, for what it matters ?
Stuff like what happens in this story (the original ending namely) is NOT ok with me. Where do these ppl get off thinking they always know whats best for the child huh? What gives them the right to look at a family like Derpy's and say "hey even though she is the sweetest person in the world, she isnt fit to be a parent cuz she has wierd eyes so lets take her kid away."?
The story itself is pretty sad and it just reinforces me very strong dislike for government idiots like the EFPA and our world's equivalent, among many other groups. If i coulda been there, i would gladly have beaten the ever loiving shit out of every single member of Equeastria's government for this retarded move and yes, i would have gone after Princess Celestia over it too. She made the group im sure and so she is directly responsible.
ANyway, i apologize for the rant. Stuff like this just REALLY makes me mad.
In fact, I would say : Yes for paragraph 1 and 2, 3 would be toned down a little and would remove the part about Celestia. Because... Celestia, really ?
And, you know, those groups are generally semi-autonomous, mostly just giving numbers and statistics to those above them. Celestia wouldn't know about the situation (and thus solve it, so it doesn't happen again) unless a pony told her... which is what I make happen here.
Quite a few seem to like it a lot. Always great. :3
Very good alternate!
Though for me, at the end, I probably would have separated that single sentence "Finally, they would be happy and forever..." then place "together" on an entirely new line. You know, for emphasis effects. Then again, that's just me.
Either way, loved your alternate end to such an emotionally captivating story.
This ending seems more in line with the show then the original. For that, sir or madam, I commend you.
>I admit that the other one is slightly more realistic
-Huh ? You mean the one with a ''Child service'' that goes and takes Ditzy's daughter based on the vague excuse that ''she has weird eyes and speak funny. Clearly she must be unfit to be a parent... even though she has a secure job as a great mailmare, a modest-yet-still good house, and virtually nothing bad to report about her and Dinky's life.''
(I'm aware that such monumental bureaucratic error 'CAN' happen in real-life, though relatively uncommon that is, but in the other story (the way it is stated at least) it sounds as if it was perfectly normal (and legal) to be happening.)
(I'm not saying the other story was bad. NO! But, it had a visible (more or less minor) flaw (to my opinion at least)... no story is perfect after all... so, I made this alternative ending/story to give people a possible alternative (like a branching path, in video games))
Yeah, I know. I should've worded it better.
I like this choice too. Made me feel all warm and fuzzy.
With that said, I love this alt. ending
Then I read your altenativ ending and startet crying
Maybe im not dead insite I have to Thank you for that realization
Some people lose themselves, progressively losing their will to continue...
Luckily for Ditzy, she had some ponies sympathetic to her cause, and a Princess working through mysterious ways.
And, all ended like the way it should always has been.